All Comments on 'Alpha Angel vs Valiant Valkyrie Ch. 03'

Love the story and plot-line. Personally I'm in favor of option A. Love how Alpha Angel will continue to be Valkyrie's rival. Looking forward to seeing more of Alpha Angel's dominance over Valkyrie. Would love to see Alpha Angel always on top of Valkyrie.

Don't want a completely broken Valkyrie but I love her humiliation at Alpha Angel's twisted hands. Hope to see more of their encounters in the future where Valkyrie is offered hope at vengeance against Alpha Angel but always ends up utterly humiliated by Alpha Angel. Would love to see their future encounters where Valkyrie is forced into Angel's mercy and gravels away her dignity for more and more humiliation.

I prefer B, because I prefer male dom to femdom

Wish bmwf was kept separated to another story outside of anything AMWF related personally. Thumbs down on this one, unless there can be an edited version.

@titoCA321 and first Anon: yeah I'm quite curious to see the relative reactions and popularity of each. FYI ChA is pending. ChB is complete but needs one more edit pass, will probably get submitted tomorrow, so A will likely land first. Also, just FYI for this one (spoilers) the sexual femdom is mostly against Valkyrie and her fellow heroines; to the extent she dominates the dudes its more along the lines of 'I'm going to throw your ass through the wall,' than anything sexual. Well, some people might consider that sexual...

@Second Anon: sorry you feel that way. I'm still feeling my way around what people like so if that's a general opinion I'll try to be sure not to 'cross the streams' in the future. Although FYI there is at least one obligate dual interracial story coming up, but that one is simultaneous BMWF and WMBF rather than AMWF.

option "A" please!

Apologies all, I just realized I may have been unclear: when I said a choice of endings, both options are going to get published no matter what. It's your choice to read either or both. A is likely to drop first because it was submitted first but B is also coming out too.

Well, of cource B! Both should bow to the feet of the Khan. Silly girlish squabble must be settled by a strong hand of a true conqueror of Beachport.

Frankly, i am not very impressed with Alpha Angel character, would like to see her ass plowed by Attila and his Horde.

I have a mixed opinion about "Second Anon" suggestion. I definitely want to see more AMWF (or rather AMXF, since your masked beauties is a multi-racial stock) focused stories and less bmwf (not my type). But, at the same time i am afraid such "segregation" will put an extra bondaries on you and content will suffer.

Keep up the good job and thank you.

4th Anon: quick question, when you say you are not very impressed with Alpha Angel, does that mean generally not into her or that you actively want to see her get wrecked? Those are two very different pieces of feedback from my perspective!

Yeah, sounds like mixed message, my bad. I'm actually not sure.

I am not into her coz i cant visualized her (maybe my problem not yours) or understand her role (heroine,villain,someone in between).

I kinde of hate her coz i have a big crush on VV, so I dont like to see some pink-haired upstart overshadows and humiliates her (villains have their way with her it is a fair game). That is why I want Alpha out of picture the hard way. Hope it make sense.

P.S. I can be hard to understand, coz English is not my native language. Sorry about that.

No worries. If you can’t visualize her, then that means I didn’t describe her well enough. Even with a language barrier, something as straightforward as what a main character looks like (particularly an intended lust object) should be really clear, so that’s my fault. I probably won’t be putting in a fresh description of her mid-story, but I’ll try to be careful to describe her clearly next time she shows up.

I will say, in my head, she’s one of the more clearly visually-defined heroines, albeit she does have a lot of extra accessories which doesn’t help. For her design, I basically just took an IRL model wearing a vertically-striped bikini, mentally added in blue thigh boots and a jacket, and then covered those in stars to hit my ‘has all the elements of the US flag’ quota. That’s basically it.

On the pink hair thing, I think I may have hit a cultural landmine without meaning to, I intended it as more of just an exotic coloration thing. As we shall see in Part B (mild spoilers), it’s not her real hair color. I mean obviously it’s not, but I mean it’s not the one she walks around with in her ‘real’ identity either, it’s explicitly a part of her disguise.

As for her role and who she is - well, as mentioned at the start, this is a bit of an exaggeration of what she is intended to be going forward; she is basically playing a villain in heroine’s clothing here. Who she is… well this is my fault too, but it’s on purpose this time, the story has been deliberately keeping that under wraps until the very end. If you can stand to, I would actually recommend trying to read through some of Part A when it drops, as it should give you some insight into what is actually going on with her. (Mild spoilers follow): you can skim the parts where she’s tormenting Valkyrie, because yeah there’s more of that. I don’t know where it will land in Lit’s page system, but skim ahead to when Alpha Angel and Valkyrie leave the Big Stallions’ building (just short of halfway through). [Edit - just checked my draft and the word ‘Emerging’ is used at the start of the section I am referring to and nowhere else, so searching for that word should take you there directly on whatever page it lands on]. Read through to the end of that scene. Then maybe skip ahead to the very end, and just read the last few paragraphs. That should give you a much better idea of what her whole concept is. Admittedly, burying that sort of reveal at the end is a little unfair; on the other hand it is kind of the whole conceit of the story.

If you don’t want to go through that, then don’t worry: what Part A strongly hints at, Part B proceeds to lay completely bare… very literally. Speaking of, Part B took a bit longer in revisions than I anticipated, it just got submitted today. That said, the delay came with some compensations: when I started, B was a little shorter than A; the final draft ended up being about 20% longer. So you got some extra material in exchange for the wait.

No worries. If you can’t visualize her, then that means I didn’t describe her well enough. Even with a language barrier, something as straightforward as what a main character looks like (particularly an intended lust object) should be really clear, so that’s my fault. I probably won’t be putting in a fresh description of her mid-story, but I’ll try to be careful to describe her clearly next time she shows up.

I will say, in my head, she’s one of the more clearly visually-defined heroines, albeit she does have a lot of extra accessories which doesn’t help. For her design, I basically just took an IRL model wearing a vertically-striped bikini, mentally added in blue thigh boots and a jacket, and then covered those in stars to hit my ‘has all the elements of the US flag’ quota. That’s basically it.

As for her role and who she is - well, as mentioned at the start, this is a bit of an exaggeration of what she is intended to be going forward; she is basically playing a villain in heroine’s clothing here. Who she is… well this is my fault too, but it’s on purpose this time, the story has been deliberately keeping that under wraps until the very end. If you can stand to, I would actually recommend trying to read through some of Part A when it drops, as it should give you some insight into what is actually going on with her. (Mild spoilers follow): you can skim the parts where she’s tormenting Valkyrie, because yeah there’s more of that. I don’t know where it will land in Lit’s page system, but skim ahead to when Alpha Angel and Valkyrie leave the Big Stallions’ building (just short of halfway through). [Edit - just checked my draft and the word ‘Emerging’ is used at the start of the section I am referring to and nowhere else, so searching for that word should take you there directly on whatever page it lands on]. Read through to the end of that scene. Then maybe skip ahead to the very end, and just read the last few paragraphs. That should give you a much better idea of what her whole concept is. Admittedly, burying that sort of reveal at the end is a little unfair; on the other hand it is kind of the whole conceit of the story.

If you don’t want to go through that, then don’t worry: what Part A strongly hints at, Part B proceeds to lay completely bare… very literally. Speaking of, Part B took a bit longer in revisions than I anticipated, it just got submitted today. That said, the delay came with some compensations: when I started, B was a little shorter than A; the final draft ended up being about 20% longer. So you got some extra material in exchange for the wait. Hope you enjoy whichever finale(s) you end up reading!

Hey, all. Both endings are now scheduled to drop 12/20, tomorrow as of this writing. (Also Zoo Ch7 drops at the same time so I guess it's going to be a red letter day for me.) Rather than A and B Lit staff elected to label them both Ch4, with Alt End 1 and 2; but the subtitles should make clear which is which. Hope they live up to everyone's expectations!