- BDSM
- Jennifer and Slave Sarah
- Page 15
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And so that brings my story up to date. Will there be new friends to join us over time, or will events tear our relationship apart? One thing is for sure, Davy and I are soulmates these days and I feel as though I've found a potential life partner.
[The end]
- COMMENTS
northernnightlight10 months agoI agree that the ending arrived abruptly. I guess that RachaelJane was exhausted by the constant gameplay, imagined as it was. Perhaps an epilogue - dropping in on the household some years later, would be fun?
I thoroughly enjoyed the read, and I join with others in appreciation of the style and imagery. The author is concerned with storytelling, and the pacing of the narrative is well judged.
I'd appreciate a little more physical description of the characters - their physiques and their grooming preferences. However, having also read RachaelJane's lesbian island tale, I rather think that she intends that the reader should conjure these particulars to their preference . How refreshing!
lazy_readerabout 3 years agoFascinating. I agree with the comment that the ending was abrupt. Although details became scarce by the end, it seems that Jennifer has fully taken on her role as Domina, which is hopeful.
I would be interested in more, to see how Jennifer and her slave(s) do. In particular, what will Jennifer do once she graduates?
Submisky35over 3 years agoLONG, BUT KEPT MY INTEREST!
Very well told and written, but I would have liked there to be more serious BDSM (since that IS the category its in), or at least more details about what bondage and punishment there was. If further writing includes that I'll be anxious to follow along. Perhaps breaking a story of this length into two or three separately published chapters might attract more readers. A story I wrote for Literotica (Millville) was published in 33 chapters, each only about 1/3 as long as this one, but each chapter containing erotic and tittilating stuff to entice readers to look for more.
Keep up the good writing!
