All Comments on 'Massaging a Muscleman Pt. 04'

I loved your first story, until the moment you introduced the third guy. It went south there.

This particular story is weaker plotwise. Linda is useless. I don't understand her reason to be here and the dialogues are so stiff and official, It's impossible to feel the characters. So many things are just weird. Linda was the masseur, suddenly Tom became one? No training whatsoever? I just don't get it. The surrounding is also vague. I didn't quite get where it all begins. In their house? In some gym? In a 'massage office' or what?

Please, your stories could be much better, if you would take a proofreader, who would help with dialogues and plotholes. Please, think about it as your sex scenes are really good and gentle, and you have great potential.