All Comments on 'Quiet, Don't Wake Him'

Too much still to be said. I know this is a 750 word entry but this could be expanded into a longer story.

Now the kids are away it would be good to hear how she reacts to the divorce papers.

5 stars.

What's good for the goose is even better for the gander!

5

"I'm expecting some kind of major fireworks show when I return next Sunday"...Really? Will he return? Why? 2*

"Staying for the kids" is such a lame excuse. It's a cop-out

Love lost. Sleep lost, too. D

Perhaps a worthy story to flesh out fully.

Staying for the kids is important. The research shows that fatherless kids are far more likely to become radicalized, or end up in prison, or become addicts, etc. When the Stasi recruited informants, they targeted people who grew up without fathers in the homes. They were so desperate to feel like they belonged, they were willing to embrace the dictatorship. Groups like Antifa today have exceptionally high percentages of fatherless kids.

Will all kids from divorce end up in radical groups? Of course not, but all kids from divorce end up psychologically damaged and about a fourth are so damaged they can be classified as psychologically abnormal.

setup but no finish

Getting fed up with these 750 word story outlines, quite boring and go seemingly nowhere.

Great storyline but I feel like something is missing ummmm....

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Ho hum

Whoever came up with this 750 word bullshit didn't do anyone any favors. Out of all the 750 crap, I think I read 2 that were worth more than a star. This was not one of them.

What is good for the goose is good for the gander. Otherwise, payback can be hell.

The cheating husband tag makes no sense, when he's not the one cheating, kind of misinformative

For me it was too big a subject for 750 words.

ZZZzzzzzzzzzz 1 star because its not a story.

And where's rhe end part?

Staying for the kids? Fine. But at least he shouldn't allow the slut assume he's too stupid to know. At least he should have some documented proof of her infidelities for divorce later on.

This one requires a finish, I gave you five as a down payment on an ending.

mmm The life of a spineless man! No backbone and no self respect. The kids are no excuse to allowing yourself to be treated like a doormat and have your "loving" wife walk all over you. The damage done to your kids by showing a live example of being a simp, is difficult to calculate. You probably disgust them for your weakness. But you've messed them up more than if you had divorced and had shared custody.

I don't get how anyone can put up with a cheating slag for days let alone years. The idea of helping the kids is bullshit. Staying in a toxic relationship is far worse for them than splitting a bad marriage.

The "for the kids" lie loses 3 stars. It creates a toxic home and model for the children's future relationships. It sound "noble", but like all virtue signaling, it's destructive nonsense.

"Well, I have to shout, so you'll understand me!" - They understand her fine, they just don't agree with her!

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@knoxhard, having a divorced father isn't the same as being fatherless.

Staying for the kids only happens on Literotica. Kids are better off with divorced but happy parents than in twi parent toxic environments

@ Knoxhard. I think.you confuse divorced but involved parents esp. fathers to fatherless children. The sittuations you quote are/were children with absent fathers. There's a difference...

2 stars for a confusing 750 word scene.

Suggestion: 14K version of this plot.

I liked it.

Darn short

Everyone seems to misunderstand the 750 word challenge,

it IS NOT to WRITE a "story" 750 words long

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it IS to write a STORY 750 words long

He put up with her cheating shit WAY too long. Three stars ⭐️ is a generous score.

Blah. Either take decisive action or just so t do anything. Seems like MC just uses the kids to stop him from just dumping the slut and moving on. How could a military man sit back for two years doing nothing?

Well written till is stopped. As they say FINISH THE DAM STORY!!!! This was all set-up, this is not a story until you conclude what happened. It's like your boss said you did a fantastic job, there will be a bonus. I'll write you a check. then they just go home and your wondering if you will ever get paid. That is how us readers feel!!!

Get mental help. God damn that was dumb

For those who insist they know his "staying for the kids" is wrong, you're some clueless academic.

The story shows her as a controlling bitch of a wife. If you have never dealt with one, she would have taken younger kids away from him in a divorce and poisoned them against their father. I've seen this happen in real life to multiple marriages.

So, once a guy gets trapped in such a marriage, it's often a choice between the kids or tolerating the bitch. But divorce with young kids rarely ends well when splitting from a toxic individual.

It’s a great set up for a story, but didn’t really tell a story

This is one of those stories that would have best been told as a far longer story than 750. You need to actually show her reaction... Flesh out her being a dumb bitch who thinks her clueless husband.

If that is, she is clueless and thinks he has no idea..From your other stories I'd give her a 60% chance of thinking her husband knows and either does not care or is a full cuck and gets off on it.

Her reaction could just as easily be "Oh well.He finally caught on...No prob. Now I can stay out longer."3 stars

I'm more interested in the fireworks that will happen next Sunday than anything I read in this attempt at a story.

Where's the beef???

So, weekend details and then the fireworks?

No more games. The kids are out of the house. Move her crap into a different room don’t speak to her again, then put a for sale sign in the front yard. She’ll get the message pretty quick. Make sure the kids are on board and find a new place with room for them.

Take it from a former kid whose parents stayed married "for the sake of the kids", get the damn divorce!!

To the dad, tell the Mrs. you'll send the child support $ home with the kids WHEN you see them!

And make the payments WEEKLY (not monthly)!

Damn! A Lifestyle66 story that I actually enjoyed and want to read more of.

Ok..that was 750 words of building up to a story… now where is the story?

"The story shows her as a controlling bitch of a wife. If you have never dealt with one, she would have taken younger kids away from him in a divorce and poisoned them against their father. I've seen this happen in real life to multiple marriages.

So, once a guy gets trapped in such a marriage, it's often a choice between the kids or tolerating the bitch. But divorce with young kids rarely ends well when splitting from a toxic individual."

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Was all that information in the section of the story you DIDNT post?

@author: Except most people aren't toxic. So, divorce is still the better option for the vast majority. So, yeah, the academics might know what they're talking about.

So he is cheating2? Silly game... **

Awesome setup for more drama. From having read many of these short stories, I've come to believe that 750 word stories need to have a beginning, middle and end. There doesn't seem to be sufficient word space in such short story to create a cliff-hanger with a satisfactory end point.

this. This is what you submitted for a contest? Needless to say you didn't win, right?

She carefuly climbed in bed thinking I was asleep. I let her settle in before loudly saying, “I’M AWAKE!! LET’S FUCK!!!” knowing her heart would be racing for hours, negating her “I’m tired” excuse.

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I know 750 words is challenging, but this was missing… feeling?

I'd like to have seen this one being longer and more fleshed out. Why do I want to see(hear about) the fireworks for next Sunday?

Sheesh, people still complaining that a fast food burger isn't a steak dinner.

Everyone gets it, you want more from a story than 750 words allows for.

So do the rest of us a favor and STOP READING THEM!

These aren't like the stealth cuck-tales or RAACs that don't reveal themselves until you're well into it.

The word count is posted at the top of the page, just takes a second to look.

@Author: good job with what you had to work with. Thanks

Short and sweet. He probably wishes his marriage was also.

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Sad story, well written.

Makings of a good story,but needs more.

For readers who would like a longer version of this story and main character, try reading my story "Abuse Addict".

We post them because they're fun and challenging to write. It's not a contest, it's a writer's project; a joint exercise. So, the question is back to you, why read them when you've been given full warning? Skip them like any other category you skip.

As for this entry into the 750 Project, very well done. We know what Hubby's been putting up with it, we know why he did it, and we know that he finally sees a light at the end of the tunnel.

What's to even like?