All Comments on 'The Cruise Pt. 03'

I had found the first parts interesting with a probable development of a 3-way relationship with a sexually very active husband, a wife with less libido, and the best friend who had a solitary existence.

These 3, could seem to complement each other and generate a new type of romantic relationship for 3.

But there, you seem to be going to an open marriage, without love, without feeling, just for fucking. It's really unfortunate for me.

In the words of “Highlander”, in the end there can only be one. Only a matter of time before Jenny’s motivations are revealed. 4*

Liking the way this is going this but a couple of ‘picky’ points for example in the last paragraph when they were on the bed you say ‘We watched something plain and normal there was a little space between us’. What were they watching?

There are a couple of instances like this, you did not say that Jenny had come in whilst they were in the shower and that it was her listening at the wall.

Although he had put his penis in Emma they had not really fucked, she got him off over her tits.

Some of the movements in the hot tub were a bit awkward. Perhaps a careful re-read before posting.

Please take this only as constructive criticism, I really like what you are writing.

Love the slow, measured buildup in this series

5 stars, I like where this storyline might go and the way it is being told. I can certainly see the young neighbors getting involved and Jenny's libido walking up to a fever pitch. After all, they're on vacation, the liquor is flowing, and inhibitions are lost for a while.👏

I hope you keep between these three

I’m really liking your stories, all of them! Can’t wait for more. Thank you! 5 stars all the way.

Stupid. Why be married?

Wife will be the loser.

This just keeps giving, I think you wrote this so well, it’s just paced right,

great story and sounds so much fun

@guzzieathome

RE Great stories, couple of ‘errors’?

"As I emerged from the bathroom, In the room Jenny was stood next to the bed, her ear to the wall."

"Ok well just watch a movie or something or get some food."

Looks like you missed a couple of things while you were more concerned about "picky" things.