I usually really like n enjoy ur work. But this story line started out great now im affraid its just fluff hardly any action just running all over the country. Seems to b getti g draen out waaaaaaaay to much. Just 1 readers opinion

Ten stars!! I love your writing. A realistic approach to a bad situation and realistic actions to back it up.

I have been reading stories on the Loving Wife site for some time, and I think I have read all of the more popular stories and their many rewrites, and I must admit that Karen McDonald is the most evil, vile, despicable female character I have read about on this site.
I will admit that of all the versions of "Another Love" I have read, this is as close to the way I would have done it up to the point of Karen getting sick and living with Avril, no way. It should end with the divorce and Rob moving to Ohio and maybe trying to reconcile with his sons.
Now to my real problem with this and all of the versions I have read(please correct me if I am wrong with this).
1. Avril clams she was never more proud of Phillipe than when he came to live in the McDonald home because the boys needed a man's influence while Rob was gone. She was never asked to explain what kind of an influence a French-Canadian man 10 years older than their dad was going to have. Did he take them fishing, hunting, to a football game, play baseball in the back yard, see fireworks on the 4th of July, or how to be a lying, exploiter of women.
2. Karen was never asked; what did Phillipe do for the year he was there. Did he have a job, did Karen go to work every day, did the boys go to school, did Phillipe take them. Did he mow the yard, wash the car, fix the toilet, or did he just supply Dick.
3. And the real kicker, Did Karen pay this man to be there, give him an allowance to fuck her, eat their food and live in their house.

Little awkward in a few places but a great adventure. 4.6*

Randi wrote one of the first comments. She not only writes good stories, but she also writes damn good comments!