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Very nice

Hi,

I stumbled over your series and gave it a try.
Normaly I am more for girl/girl action and mostly don't read anything with male leads, since they so often are about the "Bang, wham, thank you mam" as F. put it *g*
So your stories really surprised me a lot!
Not only did you see to it, that your female protagonists had their fun (even if some of it was a bit fast, but heh) but also you were able to paint a very nice picture of the pokemon world. Gave everything a nice touch of reality and "if this was real, it could work this way".

I hope you had as much fun writing this, as I had reading it ^^

Beautiful

If there's something moral in the erotic- this is it :) Keep it up!!!

Angels and

What a cute idea. I read this on Sunday and grinned for n hour.

More, more.

Please add more to this story Wonderer4.
Maybe Karen makes appointment with the
good Dr. Morton, that gets physical.
Or there might be a new doctor who
might give Dr. Morton some advise.
A doctor to doctor session you might
say.

I found Cynthia to be abrasive

Her attitude towards him was almost abusive and the thought that he would want to go for a second beer was ludicrous. She was humiliating and teasing him and men in his position tend to be sensitive about the issues she was trashing in his face. No enjoyment here.

Loved this and I will never hear the song without thinking of your story. Wonderful initiation and lifelong love and lust. Well done.

A great beginning

As others have said, a great beginning. It's a pity that this seems to be as far as it got.

Some heart in there

Perhaps it was a little drawn out, but this story had a bit of heart (not much sexy-time though). It's good to have you back writing.

You know, I hate that song with an inexplicable passion, (not that that had any bearing on what I thought of your story), but I couldn't help thinking when Diane was giving the blowjobs about that "sucking on a chili dog" line. So help me, I'm immature.
Anyway, fun story. A first time story, everyone having a good time, and lasting love, not just live-in-the-now fucking and sucking. Great job!

An interesting setup

But not one that I enjoyed. I'm not sure about the other games that she has played throughout their marriage but it sounds to me like she has some serious issues. As a husband, how did he not divorce her when she left him for a month of debauchery with another man or men? And what man (or woman for that matter), who was half asleep, would expect his wife to be packed and leaving when she whispers in his ear "I love you"? It sounds like his job in semi retirement was portable. I think he should have one of two responses. File for divorce and ignore her going forward would be the easiest and probably the best. Regardless of his love for her, the type of mental instability she's demonstrated over the years is probably only going to get worse and why would he want to continue to torture himself with her idiosyncrasies? The second choice might fit into your fictional story a little better. He should pack himself up and take a long vacation. And I mean at least a month if not months. Ignore her clues, pick a destination and head out. Only AFTER he has left would he phone his children, tell them he isn't playing their Mother's game, that he has started a game of his own. She can either figure out his game or she can continue on her own. That he was tired of chasing her, that if she wanted him, she could try and find him. And he should have made himself VERY hard to find. Maybe after a year he could file for a divorce using abandonment. In any case he needs to leave this crazy woman. No, I didn't like this unfinished story at all.

Excellent use of the first line of the story. It was creative and a recurring theme.

The overriding theme of the persistence of this couples love felt a bit like "The Notebook". It's fine if that's what you're going for. It gives the story more of a fantasy feel than a gritty realistic feel.

Overall, excellent writing as always. I felt for the character which is the important thing and makes the story enjoyable. Welcome back.

ARE YOU FUCKING KIDDING ME

that was an an awesome story with a Freaking bad ending!

Nope - you never drew me into the story

I just couldn't finish. Too many errors and the difficult story line made reading this mess impossible. No stars as I didn't finish.

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