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Great werk!

So very good tp read something from an author who didn't seemongly skip every English class after about 5th grade or so. Please KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

Bolero

If Eve had ear plugs in, then it would almost be impossible to hear the music at first. It runs about 15 minutes starting very slowly and very quietly. It repeats over and over again rising in tempo and decibel. Unless started over halfway thru the recording Eve could not have heard it as it could not have "flooded through the earplugs". Just a slight technical misrepresentation. The story is other wise enjoyable.

sentences a bit long

Try keeping every sentence no longer than 10 words.

Very impressive!

Is there an editor in the house?

Please, I beg of you, for the sake of your readers, find an editor! This could be a compelling story if it were not so predictable and did not employ sophmoric sexual terms and phrases. You have a gift for writing. Please polish it before you present it to the public. It is so distracting to have to stifle the urge to laugh while reading erotica.

A great first chapter. I like this viewpoint of the lifestyle and the explanations your characters give. Gavin seems to be a good teacher, which should be much of a dom's job. Explaining punishments and not giving them was perfect for this evening. It would be good if he also explains the things that differ among doms. What jumped out was the eye contact only when given permission. That is a personal preference. I like how you write Alex's unfolding interest and thoughts.

Horrible story

Followed by a worse ending. Epically bad.

Except that didn't happen

I think he got up and beat her to death. Stupid.

Yes, please continue!! loving it so far

I sincerely hope the next part is up yesterday, loving this story.

Seriously great writing

I don't even have words to explain how good that story is

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