Sci-Fi & Fantasy Story Comments

More! Please!

I have been working on it, and my other stories. I have a piece that might be publishable, but I'm not sure. I've put it up for a vote on my Patreon, we'll see how the vote goes there, as to whether I publish with what information I was able to give them, or if we continue to be patient....

Tbh, the only thing that’s bothering me in the story is the mc. The mopey teen angst thing is killing me.

Awesome story, good length to it. Love the stat system.

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That cliffhanger is not cool.

@Anon - thank you for the comment!

I love this little series!

There is a prologue that was supposed to be published but it was rejected for being too short. I will work on adding to it to make it longer. Anyway, hope you enjoy!

There is a prologue that got rejected which explains a bit of background information. I am working to get that published, it was rejected for being too short so I will be adding to it to make it longer.

So glad you have these two that happy ending. When I read Wren's surname, I got really worried!

approximately four and a half million words, 8 years and no ending. what a bummer. A previous comment said there's more on patreon, so the author is just a sell out. oh well. I can't say it was a waste of time but disappointing.

Thanks! I’ve written (though not edited) out to chapter 45 at this point. So I should be posting at least that far. 45 is roughly 3/4 of the planned length for book 1.

You have become one of my favorites

What could possibly go wrong with an enthusiastic newly sentient AI bound by the Three Laws playing matchmaker?

Apart, of course, from the problems that Isaac Asimov already wrote about, concerning that scenario.

Love the story. And especially how she seems to love & take comfort from him exercising control over her.

Like that last passage, where she seems happy to endure the operation that needs to be performed as long as he is there taking control. Like she clings to him as reassurance everything...

Really thought ALI would suggest at least one question!

The character development in this story is very good, I am sure this will be a great series!

I really hope that you are working on a next book of this. Love your writing!

Wow, I loved it!

@Vapordrops Glad you liked it! That's funny, I didn't think of this one as being as dark as the DEBOT series, but sometimes I have some trouble judging how dark other people will find my stories, haha.

FYI, if there are ever needles significantly involved in the story, I would warn...

Wow really love this story, would have loved to see Lisa take control of Dorjans body via possession, with him none the wiser of her joyride

I am hoping you will publish what you have soon, as long as you have a way forward with the story. We've been waiting four months to hear what happens in the Cloud city. I check every day to see if you have posted. I know many of us do.

Very good start! Looking forward to more

Minus some grammatical errors this is a good story. Thank you for sharing

Honestly so here for this plot

Captured by Yeti. Humans would've frozen if they had been waiting for him in those weather conditions.

Noticeably improved writing and dialog this chapter, nice.

The plot is great, but his aunt spends too much time chewing him out for doing what he is supposed to do. Protecting the one he is bonded to is not reckless and irresponsible. Second, what kind of fool puts on a talisman without knowing what it will do; that's how curses are caught,...

One chapter to go and you are caught up to your original, though I did notice some changes from the original version.

Next chapter Gwen and Kai take Miriam up to her chambers and then Kai fucks a very submissive Gwen as Miriam recovers from her injuries. After that, hope you have...

Love this. "Ashunara grinned, "Either hope it's not hungry, or that you can run faster than me I should guess." Very nice work so far.

I have to admit, I had a hard time starting with this story also and it appears you had already re-written the start. Sorry I hadn't commented...

Good chapter. Wish there was more that happened. Seems like this chapter was more of a build up for other things that are happening in the story. Can’t wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

Quite possibly one of the only chapters that I don't like. This story has been really hit or miss over the last year, which is a shame, because 10 through 18 were *unspeakably* good. Where's that author? I miss him.

This story is good but there are far too many characters with emotional/mental problems. The main characters constant whining and self doubting is getting annoying. He needs to man the hell up and be the leader all of those girls need him to be.

This just keeps getting better and better.