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this is really good, and i enjoy your stories but there are some myth errors! Zeus is the youngest of the original Olympians, Demeter is older than Poseidon, Aphrodite is Demeter's niece (but sister if you're going by the sea-foam version of her myth). And Helios is a titan, so not Zeus's child, that would be Apollo who later became known as a sun god for his nickname "lord of light" which was supposed to mean (in context) that he was a truth god/god of prophecy (among other things). As for the Zeus/Demeter relations, Demeter was Zeus's first wife, he later married Hera, so Persephone is safe (for the most part) from Hera's wrath. This got long, I'm sorry, it's just little things like that just upset me ;.;'

Too Long. Too much of a fantasy. I realize that people do things because "they can" but that is not an excuse for stupidity. I also realize that, once a break occurs, it should be irrevocable.

Other than that: well written but too long.

An odd story.

I think I understand the concept of this writer's challenge. And I liked the way this was written from a technical standpoint. But it really felt like the middle chapter of a book. We need to know more about these people. Their history. Those would be the beginning chapters of the book. Then we need to know how he played the "Game". Did he go looking for her or did he rent a nice beach house, do some writing of his own and wait for his wife to come find HIM! That would be a good twist to their game. The closing chapters of the book would detail how their lives were effected by the "Game" and what happened to them. Overall, this was just frustrating. This is the kind of story wherein I really miss FTDS.

Not for the faint of heart

Not for the unintelligent who cannot discern between hopeful fiction and abiding anger. I liked it.

O.M.G. !!!!!!!!

This was excellent !!!!!!! Ignore the negative comments. I loved it. Thank you so much . You did a fantastic job with this story.

Nice, very nice.

A very touching story. It is a rare find on Lit, but once in a blue moon one like it pops up that can really grab the reader.

Liked it.

Taken in total this was a we'll written, entertaining, and enjoyable yarn.

Sucked Big Time

Hated the story. He turned into what he hated the most. A FRIGGIN CHEATER!!!


I would of used the so called, "safe word" as-soon-as she started to restrain me. Gotten a couple of suitcases, and packed my bags and left....let her try and figure out why..

Cucked Good?

Really liked the story, until she comes back into the picture, then he goes from being a man to a cuck.
Believing that after 6 months she hadn't slept with him or anyone else, is just plain stupid.
She destroys his life in his country of birth and he just takes her back!

Alas, Anonymous 8/12/13, but I have a PhD and, even though I don't use a lot of big words or work in a lab, I've had women lose interest quickly because they thought they weren't "smart enough." It happens. Actually, getting a PhD says more about being too dumb to quit than about being all that smart.

I love the shout out to the kids' book. It was a favorite when my daughters were growing up.

Does not make any sense.

He's living a hermit but has two chairs. How did she find him. Why did he buy her a meal. Why did he owe her and apology for living his life as normal when she barges in on him. He start out ok and you turn him into a damp wimp!


I'm so horny right now I just want to fuck someone

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