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Hooked!

You've got me hooked onto this. That suspense where Piplup suddenly uses Hydro Pump - I was surprised! Thought it was Level Five or something. By the way, Piplup doesn't really have a type advantage against Garchomp. While Water is super-effective against Ground, Dragon actually resists Water. It probably doesn't make much of a difference to most readers, but proper fans of the Pokemon games might throw a hue and cry. :)
Nice story though. Looking forward to reading the rest of it.

Damn! Hard almost the whole story.

About as perfect an incest story I’ve ever read. Some were “nastier”, i.e. more graphic, but none sweeter. And the reason for the sex was so... right. I mean, there really was a reason for it, not just lust. And loving. Especially like the break up at the end. It just seemed... well again, so right... and true feeling.

This is a definite 6-stars. Too bad I can only give it five. Bravo.

Not for the faint of heart, II

I completely agree with HotFoot2, this is just fucking outstanding. I hope to write this well someday. Thank you for sharing it with us.

SURPRISE!

I'm used to JPB stories just stopping with no finish or resolution, leaving me hanging and frustrated. I read this one only to see how someone else would finish it. Surprise! JPB finished it! And an intriguing finish it was with interest-holding, unexpected twists and turns. In fact, the end was a thunk-the-forehead moment: he takes her back knowing she's currently cheating, when he initially rejected her when she was not actually cheating?!?!?! I guess these weird unexpected twists make it more interesting.
Still not finished. What happens with their last attempt? And the daughters?
Paul in Oklahoma

Well

at first I thought it was going to be realville. Then it went mission impossible on us. Enjoyed it though. Guess I'll search for other versions.

Anon1/1

Interesting story. Relevance to this story?

For myself, any sex while we were separated would have been no problem. Sex or even an emotional affair with the lawyer after she moved back into my bed would have been a deal killer. Wouldn't have happened though in the first place. To all you young single men, if she runs with a motorcycle gang or some other bad boy, don't consider her as wife material unless you are an even badder boy. If she drinks more, does more drugs than you, etc f her if you must but don't let her in your heart or house.

Loved it!

Awesome but also a bitter sweet ending love the overall story build up and characters. Probably the best pair of twins I've read in any story on here thus far.

uh

this is really good, and i enjoy your stories but there are some myth errors! Zeus is the youngest of the original Olympians, Demeter is older than Poseidon, Aphrodite is Demeter's niece (but sister if you're going by the sea-foam version of her myth). And Helios is a titan, so not Zeus's child, that would be Apollo who later became known as a sun god for his nickname "lord of light" which was supposed to mean (in context) that he was a truth god/god of prophecy (among other things). As for the Zeus/Demeter relations, Demeter was Zeus's first wife, he later married Hera, so Persephone is safe (for the most part) from Hera's wrath. This got long, I'm sorry, it's just little things like that just upset me ;.;'

Too Long. Too much of a fantasy. I realize that people do things because "they can" but that is not an excuse for stupidity. I also realize that, once a break occurs, it should be irrevocable.

Other than that: well written but too long.

Not for the faint of heart

Not for the unintelligent who cannot discern between hopeful fiction and abiding anger. I liked it.

O.M.G. !!!!!!!!

This was excellent !!!!!!! Ignore the negative comments. I loved it. Thank you so much . You did a fantastic job with this story.

Nice, very nice.

A very touching story. It is a rare find on Lit, but once in a blue moon one like it pops up that can really grab the reader.

Liked it.

Taken in total this was a we'll written, entertaining, and enjoyable yarn.

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