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Hello boys =) I want to experience the ecstasy of a mature man, to feel his caress and ability to own me! All the offer please write here http://bit.ly/2L1Dymv my name is Jessie

ANOTHER 5 STARS

Nearing the halfway point in this series and BlewWater is still thinking up new and interesting scenarios and twists. And new interesting girls. And removing girls (eg Lana) or neutralizing them (eg Stefanie and Pam) after their cherries are popped in order to pave the way for new virgins for the contest, although Beth and Sheila are as yet still unresolved.
Way to go (or cum).
Paul in Oklahoma

Um

Unrealistic... she didn’t even shower after so kind of gross... but you do your thing man.

She never told him 'No'!

She never really said 'no' nor tried to push him away nor called out to Josie (or Rosie?) for help. So I would call this consent. And she did seem to enjoy it! And she'd only had one glass of wine. I wonder if she came back for more!
Robertodavo. a.k.a Robert Davidson.

One of the best

A really good story, nice build up, great climax, and nice ending
Thanks for it - wish I'd been that lucky to learn from her

yes and no

no foreplay, no seduction, no loving, yes she enjoyed it, and yes it was without her consent, yes her first time but still belongs in the nonconsent section

Memories

30 years ago, for the Xmas hols flew across from Sydney to Perth where it was 39C. Had lunch in the shade in Kings Park, swam at Cottesloe and dinner by the water in Freemantle after the 'Doctor' arrived. Did the Perth-Kalgoorlie-Esperance-Albany loop by campervan. Even climbed Bluff Knoll in the Stirling Ranges.

Nice story, by the way. Highlight was the out of the blue, "You could sleep out here, I guess. But I was hoping you would sleep in my bed with me. It would be kind of hard for us to have sex with you on the couch and me in my bed."

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Really cute

I put off reading this for some reason and I remember when I first started and couldn't keep going. I just began again now and I'm glad I finished.

I read all the previous comments to see how well you got the Aussie vibe across since it's something I'm just barely acquainted with. It sounded like you nailed it from my brief experience and the seasoned Aussies confirmed it. Stellar on that end, from the slang to how they spoke. This always proves the hardest part to capture and preserve in writing from my different-sided literary experience.

I hate to sound like the spoiler here, but I must say it: throughout your writing-style evolution, one thing some have stated is the amount of run-ons employed and this story had a lot: in some ways they worked because of how they fit the scene/thought sequence/action (about 1/3) but in a surprising number of cases, they really distracted from the story because the sentences were wayyyyyyyyyyyyyyy too long (about 2/3). In theory, there was a good mix of short, medium and long sentences/thoughts in there, but it shocked me the number of combinations that didn't work (in other stories they flowed better). This is the wrinkle that needs smoothing out to provide the totally flowing reading experience.

If there would be one other thing I would point out, independent probability is completely against Bruce being Alex's dad and Charlie's mom meeting him to so enable Charlie and Alex to stay "hooked up." I'm all for happy endings, but sadly another author on Lit has totally ruined me on things that are always "too convenient" in his tales and I must point out this is too convenient as well.

Otherwise, great break from "Rick," who really wasn't so "cool" nor considerate as opposed to Alex that's cool and not the "shag 'em and bag 'em" type I first feared he might be. You've continued using song very uniquely in your stories and have made that device your own. Keep that up as you feel it appropriate. Nice feel-good story for Charlie and Alex, which you didn't rush. Just work out the kink and it'll be special for later tales you weave. 4.

You are more probable to fuck your self rather than fuck a muslim girl

And yeah the story can't be more fake than this
Lol just after that clear haire and green eyes with "9 inch dick"? lol yeah right sure
can't be more fake story than this story

and yeah FUCK YOU depressed dude with little dick

Just a damm good story. Tks

Good, but...

It needs editing. I kept thinking "Get on with it!" I'm not looking for "Wham. Bam Thank You Ma'am", but you do stretch it out just a bit too much.

Also, things like "She took her cock in her hand, and guided it up into the tight interior of her fanny, gasping as her vagina was filled." are rather distracting.

BTW, 'fanny' meaning vagina is not just Australian. In fact, it originated in British English and is still used everywhere except the USA, but then they don't know their arses from their elbows, so what can you expect?

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