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Where were the power dots that let her gobble up the ghosts? :-D

Great read until then end

Not sure why you ended it the way you did with the Aunt and Mom. Also would have preferred for the Aunt to be more submissive. Read a few of the others you have written and the did not have this same type of outcome. I also found it odd that you spent so much time leading up to the event and then did little to describe the actual sex why the Mom and Aunt. The anal experience was an seemed like an after thought. You didn't do this on your other stories..

rebecca and silk stockings combination is mind blowing.

it may come as a huge surprise to you that i have copied your stories MILF SEDUCTRESS and CATCHING MOMMY on MS Word and illustrated them with Rebecca's illustrations a year back, to give the feel of an illustrated story. was stunned to see that you and she know each other and you actually did a combination. you both are geniuses in your respective fields. love this combination. ask her to illustrate all your stories. it has the most mind blowing effect. Both the stories were and are still the best. as i follow you on twitter i am aware of all your stories. you still have not been able to beat these two stories in matter of erotica and arousal. i feel you both should join hands to do an exclusive graphic novel with the balloon writing done by you and illustrations by Rebecca. this could be the best sellout in the history of graphic novels~ @ ravieravan4

illustrated

i read a "how to" the other day, apparently anything with pictures/drawing etc. (illustrated stuff) is higher on the list than transsexuals/crossdressers, so it acts a bit like a trump card, as in if a user submits a story that could go in either category the Literotica site is more likely to put it in illustrated...
sexy story, think itd do better in TS/CD. maybe resubmit and ask the site moderators or something?? :)

this is good. let's keep it going !!

Author's Note

Hi
To the last commenter,
Good point. I'll have to go and check my upcoming illustrated story as I am sure I do that in that story too....
That said, such trivial errors really shouldn't impact your enjoyment of the story that much.

This is erotica, not Shakespeare.
It is free and no one, the editors or myself are getting paid.

Jasmine 2015

That all said, a good point.

What happened in editing?

Why do some stories fail to get the conversational portions properly executed? If one is speaking and is being quoted there are correct ways and then there are incorrect ways. This story had far too many which were the latter rather than the former. I will give a generic example to make it more obvious.

A person speaking about their own self would likely say, "Eat mommy's pussy." That works as thw person speaking is mommy and ahe wants the person to eat her pussy. It makes no sense for mommy to say, "Eat your mommy's pussy." The mommy and the eater know the pussy is that of their mom, so why would the your need to be included? Who speaks in such a manner? No one apart from bad actresses in low budget porn. I am not speaking of the quotes from someone else speaking about mommy to their daughter, because using your in that context would fit.

I have noticed when comments are left by fans of a writer a great deal gets overlooked in the story. Ratings are more generous and anyone giving honest feedback is called, "hater" or "jealous" by said fans. This is not the ass kissing section, and most writers are more than capable of sticking up for their own work and choices in dialogue. I'd rather read a reply from the writer than one from someone incapable of distinguishing the difference between constructive criticism and trolling.

I happen to be a fan of some stories written by this writer, so I know I will enjoy future stories also. I look forward to reading more. The illustrations were well done, and the choices fit with the written scenes very well. That must have been a huge undertaking!

Pure Debauchery

Loved it getting wanked and sucked reading about cunt lapping cunts, then fucking and sucking my two girlfriend half to death. Totally drunk on cunt juice, fucking wonderful, need at least two days to recover. I absolutely adore cunt, eating cunt tongue fucking cunt and drinking cunt nectar, doing all these things while up to my balls in cunt. Your partner must spend all his spare time totally blissed out and fucked up.

awesome

Great story with perfect artwork. Loved the shifting power and storyline. I plan on reading some of your other stuff.

A dream cum true

A great story, I would love to be in that situation, and in a dungeon even better.

Office Perks

Loved the seduction of Lily by Mistress Katherine. Didn't know enough about Lily to judge if she wanted the the cock surprise. enjoyed the lesbian story much more. Your model is delicious.!

Loved it

This is the sort of thing about which I have fantasized for ages; however, I am more oral, and more interested in eating, sucking, and swallowing. Would love to be the center of a suck off orgy!!!!!!!!!!

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