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Fantastic I thoroughly enjoyed and Dave definitely did the right thing

A well-written story about a truly loving wife (so, no way it should be in Loving Wives *smile*).

The story is fantastic. One of the best things I've read on the forum here. Hope they continue the humiliation of Andy and that Abbie goes deeper and deeper with Dean.

Needs an ending or it’s pointless.

Epic dialogue and super descriptive and lively. The story keeps getting better. Cheers man!! 🥂

Too bad it ended there when it was starting to get good

More!

Sorry about the delay, I had issues passing the AI test after using Grammarly for help editing.

It’s interesting seeing comments about the story content re her body image and the grammar or word choices, people see things in different ways I suppose. The way I read it was that this was a girl who has fenced off parts of her life and is working hard at her job and on herself,...

Yes a fantastic tale ….. a perfect distraction at the crazy violent times we are running through, in a global eying …… yes the little help of a friend, the beatles already used this for a famous so g and you girl made it big too, into a marvelous lovely Rose tale ….. absolutely...

Can't wait to see what Erica gets up to eventually.

Another great story.

There's no crying in erotica!

Yeah, right.

What happens next?

"We'll pay you back," Simon promised.

"And will you also take a nine-inch cock in your ass for me?" Janice snapped.

Simon didn't say a word. He just hung his head.

They pay her back... one at a time.

Great story, good depth, although I do miss you just ganging up on Traci like you used to sometimes!

I could excuse an overly enthusiastic hug, possibly a brief inappropriate kiss, but to strip off your clothes and fuck? Nah, that's intentional and deliberate. She was feeling entitled and rewarded herself with no thought of her spouse. I would have split as soon as possible, but...

Really interesting way of looking at a story from a different angle.

MEGA BURN

lot of funny comments

Ah, incest is such a taboo and exciting relationship. A very well thought out and written story. I definitely look forward to reading more of your work. As this is my first foray into your writing and the first story you posted here I have added you to my favorites list. I appreciate...

Great start! Good writing and characters.

Vast tracts of land??? I love it - are there discussions of the load carrying capacity of swallows next?

I'm enjoying this, I get that Beth is role playing younger, but I think you're overplaying the element of "old man". 39 fucking a 20 year old is not exceptional.

A bit random, but I like random. Well done! Finn

Enjoyed it. A hopeful story. It’s a happy thought that two people can experience enough growth to become sufficiently different people that they can trust again and make a new contract with that new person. 5*

Very enjoyable, really nice to see him enjoying time with his friend at dinner. :)

Excellent writing and so exciting. Keep writing!

Disliked less for the silly hyperbole rather lost way with seeking attractive female … tried 10 or 15 ??

If you don't do a next chapter, you are missing a great opportunity! ;)

Chapters 1 - 27 are complete, including the finale. Chapters will arrive on Literotica about a month apart.

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Thanks for reading!

The truth always comes out eventually. When it does, someone else will be getting his best and she will have nothing.

Hot!

It is a great vignette as is. And I would love more! :).

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What do you have in mind? A second part that risks the knife point balance you achieved with its glorious ambiguity or leave as it is with its excruciating uncertainty?

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Tasty

Original; I like original. 5*

the master of ceremonies

Hmm intriguing story line and interested to see where it goes.