Mind Control Story Comments

Well written again. Love the drama.

Excellent. Ty has issues and now a serious problem.

From having no-one Ty is picking up long time friends as well as strays. I amost believe Zoe will join them.

Onions in the letter - spot on. Emotional and gut wrenching. Just wondering when the word gets out and trouble starts.

Certainly a fast moving story. Once I catch up I'm going for your other stories. 5⛤

Love the theme. How did she keep Jennifer from outing Her?

Love the theme. How did She manage to keep Jennifer from outing her to everyone?

Nice twist 👌 👍 we can guess the cause but interested I how you proceed with so many soo horny.

What will they all think when the truth comes out.?? Great writing !!

Assume Kevin (nee Keith once on p3) is former military if he’s talking about having his 6. Makes sense with someone who has moved around, just seemed a bit odd without having established that fact beforehand.

Moving very fast but I like it

Like the story, but could do without all the other chapters put full in the beginning of this one. Do short recap or tell reader to read previous chapters.

Thanks! That comment made me re-read this. Haveta say, I enjoyed it too! The Feynman in my head always stops me taking life too seriously

I don't have any idea haw I missed this chapter until now.... I've been reading some other stuff (mostly STEM related from different sites) and I just got back to cycling through the QT universe authors. I did reread this line from the beginning, and it is quite enjoyable. Thank...

Very interesting story, conspiracies abound and then that final cliffhanger. 5⛤

A very good start, giving Los of detail about the Aussie position without repeating the background other than where it's needed here.

Sometimes simple and silly is good, loved it :)

Reminds me of a story from Marvlin666 which I always loved. Looking forward to chapter 2!

Hot! Eager for the next installment :)

I have enjoyed your series. I have read some of the other writers in this Quaranteam Series... they are not as good as your story telling and writing.

Please continue to write the story. You have great development and execution of the story and characters. Nice twists and turns......

Never apologize for churning out masterpieces like this one.

Very hot! Need a lot more of this...

wow what a stupid ending making this whole story pointless.

This is pretty great. The Richard Feynman section adds hilarity to it all.

This series is very thin on "story" and overly heavy on repetitive boring sex. Moreover, as a decent human being, John should be finding more and deeper ways of focusing on doing good with the Ring ... this would make for a more balanced and, consequently, more interesting story all...

You really need to study human female anatomy before writing as if you have experience screwing women. If she’s laying on her stomach, for example, your balls WILL NOT bounce off her ass! Unless YOU are not anatomically correct. I’m assuming you’re in middle school and a virgin. If...

Thank you, coolstrangeravenue. I'll probably post Chapter 2 next week sometime, and I hope to start work on additional stories as well. All revolving around the general themes of mind control and pregnancy, so I think you'll like them!

And hey, if anyone can guess what Bradley Colson...

Great story continues. Love the Johnson and Johnson reference. First time I saw it used was in the original Die Hard.

Johnson 1 " Just like f***ing Saigon, hey Slick? "

Johnson 2 "I was in junior high, Dickhead! "

And, no, my user name is not based on them. It is from a real dickhead...

Simply fantastic! Thank you

A pleasant surprise seeing my own story get a shout out up top, and this is itself a very good story, though definitely different from its inspiration. You really dug into the debate aspect which "Please, Sir..." glided over.

If I only had his problems.

can't wait to read more!

Consider me interested this was good.

I liked the serious tone the story has taken but Faye was a very obvious and forced-looking plot point. Granted that her early death adds to the pain but all girls are apparently his one and only true love forever till they are not, and Faye did not get enough time story-wise to really...

excellent story.....just need a boyfriend or girlfriend even a pimp ...maybe enlarged lips for BJ...tramp stamp...some tattoos....

I gotta say I'm also hooked to this story as well